05-15-2024, 09:54 PM
(05-13-2024, 04:39 PM)Bunx Wrote: The Way They SeeHi again,
Sitting, my cat looks
sideways at me with
calm solidarity.
I'm getting use to the feeling
of moisture in my eyes.
It's proof I'm human
realizing emotional traction.
My soul is dormant good edit
somewhere in this skin.
I see, what
they feel
through my art.
Scars frequencies think you could/should cut "frequencies"
resonate spirits.
Painting a
soundscape
reflecting walls
a genesis of burdens.
Their vocal vibrations
are WAV files
reflecting the weather
across an ocean. I like this new stanza
Ballads reflect stories
or a product
that was sold.
I've helped with both.
Knowingly or not.
For preachers,
pastors, and
companies too. the added lines help a lot with understanding "...a product/that was sold" in previous stanza
Children
martyrs of innocence
soiled joy
he sacrificed
your stories
to justify his.
Trauma bonding
is fucking overrated.
Just hold me. personally, I'd like to see this stanza cut. it editorializing that's out of place here.
the World
Moisture drys
after our hang.
Realization
evaporates in silence
holding me
rubbing my back.
covered in tears
Our eyes meet
a heart beat
reflects waveforms
songs of solidary.
I blurt out
"Im getting feelings".
Ex bandmate
looks, reminds.
"You know
We......
Met on tindr right?"
Yep, good edit which I hope is reflected in my comments above.
TqB