Finding the Surface

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Lost, broken, drowning

Voiceless, invisible

Empty

I came to you

 

Secrets spilled

Shame released

Tears shed

Pain endured

 

Taught to breathe

To hear the God within

To trust

To hope

 

Guide needed

God sent

Heart opened

Voice found

 

Forever grateful

Hello CW,

I've little to suggest except cutting the two lines marked above.  It doesn't seem to me that the speaker is looking for trust or hope, but vision and the ability to express that vision.  I'd agree with others, you son't need to repeat the title at the end.  If that line is important to you, maybe give it a different title.

I like the clipped nature of the lines, mostly.  A couple are awkward, particularly "Guide needed/God sent", but otherwise they work for me.

TqB