Finding the Surface

[brynmawr1]

Lost, broken, drowning

Voiceless, invisible   I agree 'voiceless' is the power word here.  All the others are implied.

Empty

I came to you

 

Secrets spilled

Shame released

Tears shed

Pain endured

 

Taught to breathe     breathless?

To hear the God within  why dilute it?  maybe use 'you' as you did in S1.  consider making this the last line.

To trust

To hope

e.g.

breathless  (there is supposed to be a space between here and the next line but....technology)

to trust

to hope

to hear you

 

Guide needed    the rest can be cut, IMO

God sent

Heart opened

Voice found

 

Forever grateful

Hey CW,
I agree with Semi but added my own take.  Pretty much an atheist, but get where you are going.  I think there is more you could do here as it is all very on the nose.  The title adds so no need for the ending lines, again IMO.
Good work,
bryn