05-14-2024, 10:10 PM
(05-13-2024, 04:39 PM)Bunx Wrote: The Way They SeeHi Bunx,
Sitting, my cat looks
sideways at me with
calm solidarity. very cool first line/stanza
Getting use to the feeling maybe "I'm getting used to...."
of moisture in my eyes.
Proof I'm human maybe "It's proof...."
realizing emotional traction.
Coping there maybe "I'm coping here"
somewhere in this skin.
I see, what
they feel
through my art.
Scars frequencies do you mean "Scars' frquencies", that is "the frequencies of scars"?
resonate spirits. another nice line/stanza
Painting a
soundscape
reflecting walls
a genesis of burdens. cool phrase
Their vocal vibrations
resonate my heart. since you used resonate already, maybe a different word here: echo, reverberate, vibrate?
Ballads reflect stories
or a product
that was sold. These two lines puzzle me
I've helped with both.
Knowingly or not.
Inside arches and
crosses stations
looking down
on me. what exactly is looking down on you, crosses or stations?
Childs ghosts.
Martyrs of innocence
stolen joy
he sacrificed
your stories
to justify his. good line/stanza
Trauma bonding
is fucking overrated.
Just hold me.
the World
Moisture drys
after our hang.
Realization
evaporated in silence evaporates?
holding me
rubbing my back.
covered in tears
Our eyes meet
a heart beat
reflects waveforms
songs of solidary. solidarity another of my favorite stanzas
I blurt out
"Im getting feelings".
Ex bandmate
looks, reminds.
"You know
We......
Met on tindr right?"
I really like the split title, cutting this poem into two sections, the first part (mostly) dealing with seeing, the second with "the World".
TqB