05-11-2024, 09:36 PM
(05-11-2024, 04:21 PM)Wjames Wrote: Words of pineapple affirmation pizzaHi WJ,
are red flags to those who love puns.
Coffee in small bookstore
bikini in Ibiza
street scene in stiletto.
The team is in the playoffs
and I am cheering in a bar
with two buddies.
Catch a fish in canoe and red flannel,
enjoy the tension and release.
Marvellous series of images, though for me personally, the third stanza breaks the spell, bringing "I" into the poem, along with a mundane setting. If that were deleted, or rewritten in the style of the other stanzas, I think it would be a better poem.
TqB