05-09-2024, 06:25 AM
Hi TqB,
Thanks for responding to my poem!
It is a bit of a weird one and I couldn't get the formatting exactly how I had it in my google document, so that didn't help its case.
I think the weird phrasing and formatting I used (mostly because I read too much ee cummings when I wrote this) is contributing to your confusion. The line is supposed to be read like "reminds his forgetting to throws crosses at passersby," but maybe that reads too awkwardly with the funky formatting.
The idea behind the poem was kind of an internal conflict between father francesco's sense of duty and responsibility to spread the message of the church and his internal base instincts to join in the mad jungle revel. I don't know exactly.
The formatting was supposed to represent that idea too.
It's probably best that "stomping beads" goes somewhere else, but as it stands I think it works in a way.
Best,
aac
Thanks for responding to my poem!
It is a bit of a weird one and I couldn't get the formatting exactly how I had it in my google document, so that didn't help its case.
I think the weird phrasing and formatting I used (mostly because I read too much ee cummings when I wrote this) is contributing to your confusion. The line is supposed to be read like "reminds his forgetting to throws crosses at passersby," but maybe that reads too awkwardly with the funky formatting.
The idea behind the poem was kind of an internal conflict between father francesco's sense of duty and responsibility to spread the message of the church and his internal base instincts to join in the mad jungle revel. I don't know exactly.
The formatting was supposed to represent that idea too.
It's probably best that "stomping beads" goes somewhere else, but as it stands I think it works in a way.
Best,
aac