04-28-2024, 05:59 AM
Knot,
I see your point about overemphasizing the snakes early on. The reason why I did so much with the snakes is that in the opening pages Steinbeck is describing the creek and includes the description that goes something along the lines of "water snakes with necks like periscopes". That description is used several times throughout the novella whenever that area is revisited, and it stood out to me. I like the imagery it provides and kind of let my imagination run as far as creating an interaction between Lennie and the snakes. So far in my revision, I've restructured the narrative to make the snake thing come in a bit later and be more of a background image.
Anyway, the edit is out now. Tear it apart. I'm keeping the bad title for the time being just because I'm conflicted over a replacement right now.
Am I meant to give feedback on another post when I do a revision? If so, I'll get right on that.
Thanks a ton,
aac
(I'll go with ack! for the pronunciation, like choking on a cracker)
P.S. this is kind of off-topic, sorry, but I literally just got one of my other poems accepted by Eunoia Review and I am freaking out right now!! Hence the gross use of "literally"
I see your point about overemphasizing the snakes early on. The reason why I did so much with the snakes is that in the opening pages Steinbeck is describing the creek and includes the description that goes something along the lines of "water snakes with necks like periscopes". That description is used several times throughout the novella whenever that area is revisited, and it stood out to me. I like the imagery it provides and kind of let my imagination run as far as creating an interaction between Lennie and the snakes. So far in my revision, I've restructured the narrative to make the snake thing come in a bit later and be more of a background image.
Anyway, the edit is out now. Tear it apart. I'm keeping the bad title for the time being just because I'm conflicted over a replacement right now.
Am I meant to give feedback on another post when I do a revision? If so, I'll get right on that.
Thanks a ton,
aac
(I'll go with ack! for the pronunciation, like choking on a cracker)
P.S. this is kind of off-topic, sorry, but I literally just got one of my other poems accepted by Eunoia Review and I am freaking out right now!! Hence the gross use of "literally"