Being Nemesis 2 (edit)

[Knot]

Hi duke,
some strong lines, but doesn't feel quite coherent ... yet.
Did wonder if sticking with the original title works, also whether FPS (First Person Shooter) might be worth considering? Alternatively


point of presence


unseen not because
they never look up...
no, I’m just not there.

touch of joystick
tap of screen
death-eyed I fly


(For me the rest had a touch too much melodrama though I could see a version of 'I fear only' might fit between these two.)


Best, Knot


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