Dandelion

[mrmod]

If someone told you
you were a weed,
What would you believe? < I love this rheotorical question, bang in the beggining of the poem

I’m just a little dandelion,
with no one to rely on.

I thought I was
a beautiful wildflower. (maybe you could just make it shorter, "I thought i was beautiful" because to me it doesn't quite add-up )


Until he spoke
and said
it wasn’t so.

Sticks and stones
don't break my bones,
and names
will always hurt me < I especially like this last line because it is an obvious play on the known expression, but it also gives the idea of being hurt.

©10/30/09

I really like the informal tone of the poem. It brings an innocence and "childhoodness" about it . This fades out in the last stanzas as we see that she/it is hurt.

No poem is perfect but this one I like. I can see the theme of nature a bit but it does make me wonder about how just simple words can hurt someone (a lot) .

Keep'em coming, you can only get better .