Fogwood [edit3]

[Wjames]

Fogwood


March Carolina dogwoods
popcorn-blossomed float between I think it might be better if float is before popcorn-blossomed?
dew-grassed sighing earth
and foggy sailcloth sky.

It’s as if trees were spraying 
whiteful joy from upright trunks
through boughs and branches deep into
a breath-held overlay 

or bashful Sun cascaded flowers
into each laden swelling stem
brightly nursing, nourishing  I think you can improve on "brightly nursing" - nursing is already covered with nourshing, and brightly by flowers. My thought would be changing "brightly nursing" to something like "a lei" (may be a bit too hawaiian for Carolina), or "a vase", or "a smile" (could work well with all the white, but may be a bit redundact with whiteful joy above).
this ancient newborn world.

original version;

March Carolina dogwoods
popcorn-blossomed spew between
dew-grassed lemon-crocused earth
and foggy sailcloth sky.

It’s as if trees were spraying
whiteful joy from upright trunks
through boughs and branches deep into
a breath-held overlay

or bashful Sun cascading flowers
into each laden swelling stem
brightly nursing, nourishing
this ancient newborn world.

Hey Duke, this is really good, lots to see and smell and feel.