03-15-2024, 11:00 PM
(03-15-2024, 09:39 AM)dukealien Wrote: Fogwood
March Carolina dogwoods
popcorn-blossomed spew between "spew" seems a coarse verb to use here
dew-grassed lemon-crocused earth
and foggy sailcloth sky. these last two lines seem a bit overcrowded with images; I'd consider cutting "dew-grassed". "foggy sailcloth sky" is excellent.
It’s as if trees were spraying
whiteful joy from upright trunks
through boughs and branches deep into
a breath-held overlay really like these last two lines
or bashful Sun cascading flowers
into each laden swelling stem
brightly nursing, nourishing
this ancient newborn world. great finish