Cold Currents (was Winter Current)
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The simile and metaphor words, 'like' and 'as', are not necessary in poetry like this. I'd eliminate 'of', too. And 'a'.


North winds
tide ?a? stream ?of? cloud
caverns, I lost your name


I'm not considering meter.
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RE: Winter Current - by busker - 02-18-2024, 06:56 AM
RE: Winter Current - by RiverNotch - 02-19-2024, 06:31 PM
RE: Winter Current - by rowens - 02-19-2024, 10:28 PM



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