70's Love Song(edit)

[brynmawr1]

Hi Bryn,
like the title, and the scene. Just seems a bit too long (and slightly repetitive. I like sprouts as much as the next man, but there seem to be a few too many here.)


Tuesday night, the wife’s been working ………… not sure about ‘the wife’ (doesn’t seem to fit the mood.) agreed
late again, she’s up soaking out the grit
Rod Stewart’s on the Sonos singing,
“Have I told you lately that I love you?”

I’ve got the rice started, watching
to be sure it doesn’t boil over
Tonight, a Blue Apron recipe,
Chicken & Dijon Pan Sauce

I’ve learned the hard way
I can't add the garlic too soon
or it will burn. That, the fire
must be stoked or it dwindles. ………………… is ‘stoked’ the right word?  tended?

The melancholy of the mandolin
plays in time with my chopping, ………………. could these two lines be reversed?    the first two, I assume?
I can’t help singing along,
“You are my breath should I grow old … “

and here she comes hair still wet
in(?) nothing but robe and appetite.


Best, Knot


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Thanks Knot.  I see what you mean.  Time for the chopping block.
bryn