11-11-2023, 04:56 PM
I wonder how far removed you are from the conflict that you could write something so cheeky about it xD
Then again, I suppose those attempting to be poets have to be cheeky, one way or another.
Still, I think this poem is a little too equivocal, not so much with the causes or the knotty nature of the conflict, but with the proportions of dead. Since I don't really engage with the world of sports, the most specific I could go is to refer to this comic, the tenor of which I find to be more accurate: https://existentialcomics.com/comic/273
Then again, I suppose those attempting to be poets have to be cheeky, one way or another.
Still, I think this poem is a little too equivocal, not so much with the causes or the knotty nature of the conflict, but with the proportions of dead. Since I don't really engage with the world of sports, the most specific I could go is to refer to this comic, the tenor of which I find to be more accurate: https://existentialcomics.com/comic/273

