LPiA-23 Nov. 10
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(11-11-2023, 03:47 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  10 focus only on the sound of my house
9 your legs are getting heavy, your eyelids heavy
8 the sound of my voice takes you deeper 
7 deeper and deeper, background noise disappears
6 your hands relax at your side. Deeper and deeper
5 at the very bottom, there's an unwrapped box
4 you're going to put everything in this box
3 all your thoughts, all your worries, your childhood 
2 everything to ever exist before this moment
1 when I get to 0 you will wake up, a new person
Love it ! Your originality always astounds me. Even when you write a poem or song I don't relate to, I would be hard pressed to call any of it's construction unoriginal. 

But was "house" supposed to be "voice?"  I tried to let it hypnotize me but I kept thinking house was some kind of autofill typo and couldn't focus.
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LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by Tiger the Lion - 11-10-2023, 11:30 AM
RE: LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by CRNDLSM - 11-11-2023, 03:47 AM
RE: LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by Tiger the Lion - 11-11-2023, 04:30 AM
RE: LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by CRNDLSM - 11-11-2023, 06:54 AM
RE: LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by TranquillityBase - 11-11-2023, 04:41 AM
RE: LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by dukealien - 11-11-2023, 05:06 AM
RE: LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by RiverNotch - 11-11-2023, 11:18 PM
RE: LPiA-23 Nov. 10 - by Tiger the Lion - 11-16-2023, 06:46 AM



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