10-15-2023, 05:45 PM
I really enjoy the progression in this poem. The connection between a controlling partner and the god of the Old Testament is wonderful 
Of course feel free to disagree, but this might be stronger without the last two lines. The three lines preceding them are so ominous, particularly “say it on your knees”, and the context of the poem already suggests the punishment for disobeying without saying it, but with the last lines bringing such a sudden shift I don’t know that we get a chance to live in that foreboding.
Of course feel free to disagree, but this might be stronger without the last two lines. The three lines preceding them are so ominous, particularly “say it on your knees”, and the context of the poem already suggests the punishment for disobeying without saying it, but with the last lines bringing such a sudden shift I don’t know that we get a chance to live in that foreboding.