09-19-2023, 10:38 AM
well, well Lizzie, I think the revision nailed it.
Did not read the first version until after this one.
This version is a definite improvement- holds together much better, esp the counter balance of the first and last lines.
Not a stretch to say it speaks to the ‘aliens’ among us- even our neighbors.
My old man, a couple light years ago, used to call our friends alienfunseekers.
More later (hard to try this on my phone).
-Mark
Did not read the first version until after this one.
This version is a definite improvement- holds together much better, esp the counter balance of the first and last lines.
Not a stretch to say it speaks to the ‘aliens’ among us- even our neighbors.
My old man, a couple light years ago, used to call our friends alienfunseekers.
More later (hard to try this on my phone).
-Mark