09-10-2023, 01:22 PM
You worried this poem might be a bit prosey but in my opinion that’s where this piece works best. Like William Stafford’s Traveling Through the Dark, the poetry (other than Stafford’s 3rd to last line, in my opinion) is in what isn’t said.
It might be worth considering a slightly revised title, tacking “Unto” onto the front to lean in to ye olde biblical influence.
For me, this poem started in the 3rd stanza and emotionally ended in the 4th.
It might be worth considering a slightly revised title, tacking “Unto” onto the front to lean in to ye olde biblical influence.
For me, this poem started in the 3rd stanza and emotionally ended in the 4th.