Dead Bolt

[brynmawr1]

Morning's awaiting the slide and the thunk
of the dead bolt
locking behind you; it listens for chirps      Both L1 and L3 have strong rhythm and wording but the other lines break that to my ear.  either cut L2 and L4 as they are implied or try to continue with stronger wording to better continue the rhythm.
from your car keys,
                                                                               I like the transition here of pace from S1 to S2
signals of hushing alarms. In the stillness, the tea pot
whistles then yawns to the clicking of Legos the kids build;        the image of the tea pot yawning is good but get a little lost with the Legos clicking; built?
murmuring hums from the dishwasher singing its calm hymn.
Finding my pen like a friend at a party, we talk men—                   this is my favorite line, good sonics and interesting
whispering phrases the kids shouldn't hear till they grow old.     'they've grown old' just sounds better to me, can't explain it
Chatting, erasing, our thoughts can't be bound or be set free.        the second 'be' doesn't work for me, doesn't fit the rhythm to my ear

Footsteps approaching
the patio door give a quick chill:     bring?
words back in place, in their books
lest they slip out
and you blame me.                 I think bringing it back to S1 with the mention of 'you' helps complete the circle of the poem

Hi Lizzie,
I really like the image of the writer sitting in their private quiet feeling their surroundings and the special relationship with the pen.  I feel a little sorry for the ambiguous interloper that unknowingly interrupts the narrators "happy place".  I've made notes of my impressions above just to provide my prospective for your consideration.
Enjoyed the read,
steve