08-21-2023, 04:41 AM
Ruminations on the Sea
How I admire your singularity
of purpose; your timeless hurling
against rock and sand and I wonder
is it only the whip of a goading wind
that quickens your curling hands
to pummel these innocent stones? 'shores' I think was the better word choice
For I hear within your righteous roar
the counter rhyme of a retreating
sigh; the curse of forever
chasing a silver heart I really believe that the Moon was a very important element, as it controls the tides
that spurs your surge in her coming, accents fall harder to imply surging if you leave out "you in"
your ebbing again as she goes. accents trailing off to imply ebbing, which I added
some word suggestions after 'forever':
at the mercy of
in thrall to
a demanding Moon
a ruthless Moon
an aloof Moon
a steely Moon
How I admire your singularity
of purpose; your timeless hurling
against rock and sand and I wonder
is it only the whip of a goading wind
that quickens your curling hands
to pummel these innocent stones? 'shores' I think was the better word choice
For I hear within your righteous roar
the counter rhyme of a retreating
sigh; the curse of forever
chasing a silver heart I really believe that the Moon was a very important element, as it controls the tides
that spurs your surge in her coming, accents fall harder to imply surging if you leave out "you in"
your ebbing again as she goes. accents trailing off to imply ebbing, which I added
some word suggestions after 'forever':
at the mercy of
in thrall to
a demanding Moon
a ruthless Moon
an aloof Moon
a steely Moon