#dadlife

[rowens]

I come back and say again that this poem seems finished.

Otherwise, I would have reworded it in my own way.


When I read it the first time, I didn't see a thing I would change.

You maintain your chosen "form" and make sense all the way through.

There may be some ambiguity for some readers. A little challenge never hurts, often improves an otherwise bore.

I don't have kids, so I'm not into such expressions. But I admired the art of it.

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Admired,


Ask me again in ten yeats, I mean yeats.

Shit, you know what I man


WB Yeats.


no, years.



Yes. The poem is good. Ask anybody.