Midnight Oil
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(08-06-2023, 10:37 PM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  
(08-06-2023, 07:33 PM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  Midnight Oil

Unnerved
held in check
by science and doubt
seeking the consolation
of a thunderstorm
whose kingdom of rain
erases all pain
kaleidoscoped alarm          I verbed it, not sure it's a word but....
assassinates hesitation
sky raptured without
an unlikely wreck         maybe better word than 'unlikely'
on a silent curve.
Good morning,
Another good one.  Not much to suggest.  I bolded my most favoritest parts.  
take care,
steve
Thanks Bryn,

I've edited it.  I got the dreaded red underline for "kalaidoscoped", but I'm ignoring it.  We have the inalienable right to coin new words.  Although I'm pretty sure I've seen "kalaidoscoped" before.

Thanks for the read and the suggestions; they improved it.

TqB 
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Messages In This Thread
Midnight Oil - by TranquillityBase - 08-06-2023, 07:33 PM
RE: Midnight Oil - by brynmawr1 - 08-06-2023, 10:37 PM
RE: Midnight Oil - by TranquillityBase - 08-07-2023, 07:30 PM
RE: Midnight Oil - by Mark A Becker - 08-09-2023, 09:07 PM
RE: Midnight Oil - by TranquillityBase - 08-09-2023, 09:24 PM
RE: Midnight Oil - by O. M. Geezersnaps - 08-11-2023, 01:54 PM
RE: Midnight Oil - by TranquillityBase - 08-11-2023, 07:09 PM



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