Haiku -- Curious Cosmos
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(08-03-2023, 08:14 AM)Lizzie Wrote:  Curious Cosmos,
sees its golden seeds dropping,
peeks over the vase.
I like it as a short poem. 
If you put 'haiku' in the title then you're gonna get freaks like me that'll say it's not.  Tongue
If you take 'haiku' out of the title then it solves all issues. I would say that in a haiku; cosmos could not be curious, whether it be the flower or the universe. However if it's not a haiku then it works perfectly and it also allows the possibility of ambiguity with Cosmos, which I as a reader want, especially when the Cosmos is curious.

Anyway like I said, I'm a freak

and your link to a picture of a flower is broken

Mark
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Messages In This Thread
Haiku -- Curious Cosmos - by Lizzie - 08-03-2023, 08:14 AM
RE: Lavender hair, yellow eye - by Wjames - 08-03-2023, 09:17 AM
RE: Lavender hair, yellow eye - by Lizzie - 08-03-2023, 10:51 AM
RE: Cutting - by brynmawr1 - 08-03-2023, 11:10 AM
RE: Cutting - by TranquillityBase - 08-03-2023, 06:30 PM
RE: Wilted Cutting - by Quixilated - 08-03-2023, 09:38 PM
RE: Wilted Cutting - by Lizzie - 08-04-2023, 02:20 AM
RE: Wilted Cutting - by Tiger the Lion - 08-04-2023, 02:33 AM
RE: Wilted Cutting - by Mark A Becker - 08-04-2023, 08:24 AM
RE: Haiku -- Curious Cosmos - by Lizzie - 08-04-2023, 10:43 AM
RE: Haiku -- Curious Cosmos - by Tiger the Lion - 08-04-2023, 11:57 AM
RE: Haiku -- Curious Cosmos - by TranquillityBase - 08-04-2023, 07:32 PM
RE: Haiku -- Curious Cosmos - by Magpie - 08-06-2023, 04:31 PM
RE: Haiku -- Curious Cosmos - by TranquillityBase - 08-06-2023, 06:54 PM



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