08-06-2023, 12:55 PM
The kids are skating solo now
and tying their own laces.
I'm left with space a scribbler needs
to study movements, faces,
This split here makes the poem.
Looking at sentence structure, and how it snakes around, how the brain coils with it. I can feel my brain. That feeling is the Pleasure. The Joy is when the ideas are placed in the right place. The mention of particulars of scene add to the spatial quality that's felt.
particularities of scene,
what's vital and quintessence.
I need a fluid, clear conceit,
evaporated to a resin.
Skating starts with an s for a reason.
The brightness and quickness of the scene compared with and the motion to the shadow and facsimile of the observer is obvious and clear.
The language sends me to iceskating, but it doesn't say for sure.
Their skating showed a subtlety
I'd missed, entranced with visions:
I'm shadow in their imagery,
facsimile of presence.
and tying their own laces.
I'm left with space a scribbler needs
to study movements, faces,
This split here makes the poem.
Looking at sentence structure, and how it snakes around, how the brain coils with it. I can feel my brain. That feeling is the Pleasure. The Joy is when the ideas are placed in the right place. The mention of particulars of scene add to the spatial quality that's felt.
particularities of scene,
what's vital and quintessence.
I need a fluid, clear conceit,
evaporated to a resin.
Skating starts with an s for a reason.
The brightness and quickness of the scene compared with and the motion to the shadow and facsimile of the observer is obvious and clear.
The language sends me to iceskating, but it doesn't say for sure.
Their skating showed a subtlety
I'd missed, entranced with visions:
I'm shadow in their imagery,
facsimile of presence.