08-02-2023, 05:52 AM
Hello Lizzie-
Enough suggestions have been offered, so I'll just give a few impressions:
I imagine a heavy silence as 'smooth and dark' as that gravy hangs over this table. I can almost hear the thin, yet exaggerated sound of silverware clinking. The undercurrent of passive aggression is palpable in this one. I would've been a very, very uncomfortable dinner guest.
I also imagine that all of the dialogue is happening inside the mind of the N, or at least that's my reading. For me this is a spooky poem- a kind of 'dinner of the dead'.
Good job,
- Mark
Enough suggestions have been offered, so I'll just give a few impressions:
I imagine a heavy silence as 'smooth and dark' as that gravy hangs over this table. I can almost hear the thin, yet exaggerated sound of silverware clinking. The undercurrent of passive aggression is palpable in this one. I would've been a very, very uncomfortable dinner guest.
I also imagine that all of the dialogue is happening inside the mind of the N, or at least that's my reading. For me this is a spooky poem- a kind of 'dinner of the dead'.
Good job,
- Mark