07-29-2023, 06:11 AM
The good news is that a human can drown in only 3 inches of water, so great depths are not necessary for the central metaphor to work.
I wonder if "meaty" doesn't blend well with the rest of the piece because it's opposite your style. We all experiment with different techniques, but the most compelling voice is always your own.
Strikes me as quite a Romantic poem, in the historical sense. Wherever your poetry journey takes you, this style does work for you judging from the intensity of people's responses.
And the fiddleheads; Romantics love those fiddlehead ferns...
I wonder if "meaty" doesn't blend well with the rest of the piece because it's opposite your style. We all experiment with different techniques, but the most compelling voice is always your own.
Strikes me as quite a Romantic poem, in the historical sense. Wherever your poetry journey takes you, this style does work for you judging from the intensity of people's responses.
And the fiddleheads; Romantics love those fiddlehead ferns...