07-29-2023, 01:49 AM
Hi bryn.
Nice vignette.
Given you've grand-daughter later you could trim the opening couplet (And isn't 'walks with a shuffle' simply shuffling?)
Late afternoon his shuffling
feet stir the red-gold rustle
But how are the leaves still rustling when it's almost spring, how are they still dry?
Maybe
up ahead. Occasionally she looks ?
Best, Knot
.
Nice vignette.
Given you've grand-daughter later you could trim the opening couplet (And isn't 'walks with a shuffle' simply shuffling?)
Late afternoon his shuffling
feet stir the red-gold rustle
But how are the leaves still rustling when it's almost spring, how are they still dry?
Maybe
up ahead. Occasionally she looks ?
Best, Knot
.

