April Takes a Walk

[brynmawr1]

This piece is quite lovely. Seasons of nature/seasons of human life are a timeless pair, never falling out of fashion. 

It has a slightly conversational feel with words that aren't strictly necessary like "occasionally" and "mostly," and those could be trimmed. Perhaps take a close look at each word and make sure that you're choosing the most dynamic and punchy word possible and leaving minimal filler in between. 

The fact that she doesn't see his smile is poignant; she sees only the new and the possible while he sees it all. She will see it all in time.

Really nice piece.

Good suggestions, thanks.  Thanks for reading and commenting.
bryn