07-27-2023, 09:22 PM
(07-26-2023, 03:21 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Auntie AudreyAgree with Bryn about the "paradigm" line. I'd also suggest cutting "slightly" in line 3 of second stanza.
too much a type
of poor Lot's wife
she got salty
with the paradigms
with that sweet Sodom burning
at her back, her turning
seemed slightly less terrifying
than entering
the kingdom of God
an impostor
TqB