Hands (ver. 5)

[Knot]

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Hi Tim.

I'm with Bryn regarding IV - and I don't think a 'summing up' is the answer. Leave that to the reader, let them draw their own conclusions. Perhaps a brief meditation on he hand's those hands have held?

Couple of suggested tweaks ...

II.

I’ve studied them,

in idle moments

read the creases

of empty palms

and restless fingers, ...... do you need this line III is all fingers after all.

the braille on the backs

of knuckles

asking, “What now?” ...... I think you need something more sensory that this (not very interesting) question.

III.

The tips of three fingers

are amputated,

middle, ring and little.

I can press them

against stone, wood, or flesh ........... do you need this (rather limited) list? ( I can press them / against the world )

feel them plunge inside,

When I press them

I can feel them

break the surface;

a stranger’s fingertips

defining absence.

Best, Knot

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