07-23-2023, 08:13 PM
(07-23-2023, 02:27 PM)RiverNotch Wrote: LOVE THE PHILIPPINESRN,
People complain that our country's new slogan
is missing a comma, it's either too forceful
or too forced, but really
it's perfection.
Case in point: for this rainy season
I learned of a way to our church
that does not flood.
Not much of a metaphor to say
so many wires stretch over those streets
the people who live there need no umbrellas,
even less that along one crossing
opens a drugstore proudly named "Arsenic"
or, along another, I was overtaken
by a motorcyclist in a plastic Stahlhelm
blazoned with a three-color swastika
while an actor-turned-senator complains on the radio
the ICC's a bully by investigating
our so-called "War on Drugs".
Really enjoyed this poem. I had to do a double take to understand that the title is the slogan mentioned in first stanza.
My only comment/suggestion is that the final stanza brings up politics, which doesn't really fit into the loveliness of the poem, the heartfelt descriptions of your ride to the church.
TqB