Hands (ver. 5)

[busker]

Hands

I study my hands
mechanical marvels 
stiff tentacles full of touch … ‘stiff tentacles’ is nicely sensorial. The ‘touch’ goes nicely. A splendid line 
palms with nothing in them
but the future. ….these two lines suddenly move from the sensorial banality of hands as hands to palms and palm reading and knowledge of the future. It is beautifully done and for me the highlight of the poem 

I’m asking them something, … this one follows logically from the reading of palms..
just what I don’t know. … but this is a weak line. 

I’m only sure they are mine. … this and the previous line make for a weak ending. The rest of the poem I wouldn’t touch - it’s perfect 

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