07-22-2023, 09:36 AM
@bryn - thanks for the crit.
This one’s a bit of a hastily dashed off poem, but as it’s complete in itself, I thought I’d post
You’re right in that it’s mostly telling - with the help of a cliche or two - than showing, and has all the flaws associated with doing that.
I’m glad the Igbo writer got some traction ?
The ‘it’ that the bullfighter wears is his own personal belief of what comes after death. He wears it in the sash on his shoulder, in a manner of speaking. That’s the rationalisation. But of course, it was done to fit the meter ?
Damn…my smileys became question marks
This one’s a bit of a hastily dashed off poem, but as it’s complete in itself, I thought I’d post
You’re right in that it’s mostly telling - with the help of a cliche or two - than showing, and has all the flaws associated with doing that.
I’m glad the Igbo writer got some traction ?
The ‘it’ that the bullfighter wears is his own personal belief of what comes after death. He wears it in the sash on his shoulder, in a manner of speaking. That’s the rationalisation. But of course, it was done to fit the meter ?
Damn…my smileys became question marks