Hands (ver. 5)

[brynmawr1]

Hands

I study my hands
mechanical marvels 
stiff tentacles full of touch
palms with nothing in them
but the future.                     This might be too on the nose.  Sounds like something I might write!  not sure it's needed.

I’m asking them something,     maybe....'I'm asking something of them'
just what I don’t know.

I’m only sure they are mine.      really like the last line but could be more strongly worded

TqB,

I like the simplicity but still poignant.  I liked the last line of S1 on the first few reads but then it seemed out of place somehow.
Enjoyed the read.
Bryn