Close of Day
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(07-14-2023, 12:34 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  Close of Day

Until tomorrow’s explanation
dusk will have to do.
It’s an inhuman job
one that needs an entire planet
to give it definition.                 I like the double meaning off 'definition' as in giving meaning and shape.

Leaves bow before a gusting wind
frenzied silhouettes
against a backlit sky’s slow turn       backlit by/in/within a ...?
to darkness.  Soon enough
the trial is over.  Judgement is delayed.

I walk back into artificial light
pleased to know all that was      I like the enjambment here with the turn into the next line
is no more and night is forever
until the disbelief of another day.
Ha, you thought you could hide here in Misc.  Very nice as usual.  Couldn't resist making one suggestion.
Take care.
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Messages In This Thread
Close of Day - by TranquillityBase - 07-14-2023, 12:34 AM
RE: Close of Day - by Mark A Becker - 07-14-2023, 11:13 AM
RE: Close of Day - by TranquillityBase - 07-14-2023, 09:01 PM
RE: Close of Day - by Mark A Becker - 07-15-2023, 01:06 AM
RE: Close of Day - by brynmawr1 - 07-15-2023, 04:46 AM
RE: Close of Day - by TranquillityBase - 07-15-2023, 09:41 AM



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