Teacup Ride(edit 2)

[Wjames]

Poking around I found
a photo from Disneyland. I think you could add more to where the narrator is poking around to let the reader place themselves there - i.e poking through the drawer, poking through the crawlspace, etc, I would add some further specificity to those examples. As it is, 'poking around' could be cut without losing anything.
The background an electric rainbow blur
their hair horizontal, bodies I want to add a comma after 'blur', and change this line to 'horizontal hair, bodies'. I think there is a natural pause after blur, and if you add the comma there, it forces a change to the following line.
curved in motion.  Only serendipity 
of light, shutter speed and aperture
could capture with clarity the eyes I don't know if 'with clarity' is right, to the way I want to read it, the image captures more than reality (as I try to clarify below), so I personally would remove 'with clarity'.
and the smiles; the almost echo
of laughter within
the spin and twirl
of a mother and daughter.

This is nice Bryn, it captures why I usually don't like looking at old videos or pictures. My happy memories are not realistic, and I like that, I like the extra bright colours and blurry beautiful light.

In memory (or art), our senses can be more vivid than reality, this is the rare photograph that captures that quality that memory can posess.