W4T (new title, revision, saying goodbye to this poem)

[dukealien]

W4T (Writing for Therapy)

Exiled from sunset
I don’t know which way is best  this line breaks the rhythm, which is not necessarily bad or unintended.  Could it be shorter, punchier, though?
to escape the lies
I smell on your breath. very nice - alcohol or (symbolically) suspected falsehoods.

These are the hot months:
you sit there so still  hate to say it, but these two lines don't predicate the next two... maybe something about your skin gleaming with sun-induced sweat?
as if you were all mirrors
except the one that you fill. again, a great closer - a chameleon narcissist, as it were.

I’ve questioned my sanity
offering tears at every halt.  perhaps simplify - "...sanity,/offered tears..." ?
My answers, loyal and quiet,
demand a little more fault.  "demand" is good here, but "a little" is weak... could those two words be profitably cut?

An inside job, says the expert, is the second comma necessary?
speaking in erasable ink dynamite line/image!
so this mainline cultist  cult of love, admiration, or just followership - nice
can see what he thinks. Good conclusion - and how it ties back to the title.  Could be "read" instead of "see," but that's a mild suggestion.

This is good, rewards a second reading.  The above aren't hard recommendations except for the first two lines of S2, which I itch to rewrite so they support the following two.