Rain Clock (edit)

[Miley]

Rain Clock 

Rain cancels the hours.  I think you can do better than cancles, maybe dampens I even prefer negates cancle takes me too directly to something like the cancel logo or cancel culture or something, maybe the image is like rain as vertical lines canceling out the hours?? Maybe cancle feels too geometric for rain, my ready anyway.? Is  there something with the circular cancle logo and its strike through and a circular clock face?
Its relentless fall 
shifts the day away from its tyranny 
of stone pointed minutes
leaving me time to breathe
the psalmody of incarnated seconds. Psalmody :O  This ending is so strange and religious/mystic 

I see why lines were cut from the first Version, in the current v the only real concrete-ish images are the rain and the stone pointed minutes (this is a clock face? a stone clock hand? a sun dial?) Maybe in the original the other images do bridge the rain and the stone point some. Interestingly a rain drop and a stone point arent too disimiliar in shape, in my head anyway, though they seem elementally opposed or something.

Rain Clock



Rain cancels the hours.

Wildflowers look up

a scripture of colors among green pages

bound in asphalt, read by the clouds.

Rainfall shifts the day away from its tyranny 

of stone pointed minutes

leaving me time to breathe

the psalmody of incarnated seconds.