First and Last Days (A Little Prayer, revised, new title)

[Knot]

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Hi Tim,
"overwritten" - yep, I think so (but it's really just the ending.)
I did miss not having a third 'wreck' in the final verse, but maybe ...

adrift on a sea of night
sweats, this old man's body
a waterlogged raft
too stubborn to sink

A tangle of wet sheets
wait for me on waking.
I groan and creak,
a  worm-eaten galleon

rising from the bottom
of sleep. Drowning in dread

or

A tangle of wet sheets
wait for me on waking.
An old man's body
a waterlogged raft

too stubborn to sink
adrift on a sea of night
sweats, I groan and creak,
a  worm-eaten galleon

rising from the bottom
of sleep. Drowning in dread


Best, Knot

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