06-18-2023, 07:49 AM
A new poem, i thought
Then I realised it was the old one.
The rewritten version isn’t working. For instance, the first three lines - too short, too regular, jarring.
There’s a lot of telling in this one.
The original was beautiful. A few tweaks, maybe, if at all.
Then I realised it was the old one.
The rewritten version isn’t working. For instance, the first three lines - too short, too regular, jarring.
There’s a lot of telling in this one.
The original was beautiful. A few tweaks, maybe, if at all.