06-18-2023, 05:01 AM
I found a place where I was lost
in green light on a forest floor,
refracted as the deepest sea.
Scattered, naked trunks of trees
The green.
Don't over do it, for no reason.
towered like meaty kelp toward the sky.
An emerald surface dipped and swayed
by waves of leeward wind. The sun beamed
in slanted rays, a quiet serenade
It may be a quiet serenade,
through a still and misted air.
Dappled ferns carpet sandy ground
swaying with a verdant tide; drawn
deeper down by each fiddlehead
Green is in all this
sun-tipped fractal curl to depths
a sailor might happily drown.
The effects you are using are good, but not fine.
And, ignoring my above review,
you have sonic effects and green color affect effects,
but it sounds mechanical.
Now, is nature mechanical?
Is rhythm?
in green light on a forest floor,
refracted as the deepest sea.
Scattered, naked trunks of trees
The green.
Don't over do it, for no reason.
towered like meaty kelp toward the sky.
An emerald surface dipped and swayed
by waves of leeward wind. The sun beamed
in slanted rays, a quiet serenade
It may be a quiet serenade,
through a still and misted air.
Dappled ferns carpet sandy ground
swaying with a verdant tide; drawn
deeper down by each fiddlehead
Green is in all this
sun-tipped fractal curl to depths
a sailor might happily drown.
The effects you are using are good, but not fine.
And, ignoring my above review,
you have sonic effects and green color affect effects,
but it sounds mechanical.
Now, is nature mechanical?
Is rhythm?