One-way Ticket (new title) final...

[Knot]

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Hi Bryn.

Not keen on the changes (except for the removal of the final stanza.)
- I liked that it was a train leaving that awakened the sleeper (not one arriving)
Also, 'leaving wakes me' has more implications that 'leaving me awake'
- the new S2 seems unnecessary, over-explaining again
- 'valley' is a bit generic (and what is it adding?)
- 'barking to be let back in' changes the tone of this verse
- would have preferred 'tight' to 'tugged'.

Best, Knot

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