One-way Ticket (new title) final...

[brynmawr1]

Listen to birds' love-barter.        It is interesting.  I've always shied away from making 'hyphen nouns' for some reason.

Why? Clever.

What other reasons? Sound?
Some other subtle connection from above?




The low whistle
of the early train 
leaving wakes me
 
on the hard side
of dreaming for
the sound of return.
 


The placement of the two "-ing" words in the lines, the word "hard", and "the sound of return" have poetic significance.
Subliminally.                    the '-ing's were intentional, the rest subliminal for me, too.
 



Down in the valley
a dog barks
to be let back in.
 
Covers tugged tight
to my chin, I listen
to birds barter for love.


Take out "tight", and the "barter for love" sounds fine as it is. 
sonically

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Sonically and Tactilely. Feelingly

Hi Rowens
Thanks for reading and commenting.
bryn

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The low whistle
of the early train 
leaving wakes me         I'd suggest moving "leaving" to end of second line; to me it reads awkwardly dropped to third  yes, trying to keep line lengths similar. posted possible fix above.
 
on the hard side
of dreaming for
the sound of return.    very nice touch
 
Down in the valley
a dog barks
to be let back in.
 
Covers tugged tight
to my chin, I listen
to birds barter for love.
 
My feet searching
the chill settle
each for the other.
 
It’s cold here.
It shouldn’t be
in mid-May.

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I'm starting to think the last stanza isn't needed either.   I think you're right.

Thanks again.