06-08-2023, 06:34 AM
Listen to birds' love-barter.
Why? Clever.
What other reasons? Sound?
Some other subtle connection from above?
The low whistle
of the early train
leaving wakes me
on the hard side
of dreaming for
the sound of return.
The placement of the two "-ing" words in the lines, the word "hard", and "the sound of return" have poetic significance.
Subliminally.
Down in the valley
a dog barks
to be let back in.
Covers tugged tight
to my chin, I listen
to birds barter for love.
Take out "tight", and the "barter for love" sounds fine as it is.
sonically
Sonically and Tactilely. Feelingly
Why? Clever.
What other reasons? Sound?
Some other subtle connection from above?
The low whistle
of the early train
leaving wakes me
on the hard side
of dreaming for
the sound of return.
The placement of the two "-ing" words in the lines, the word "hard", and "the sound of return" have poetic significance.
Subliminally.
Down in the valley
a dog barks
to be let back in.
Covers tugged tight
to my chin, I listen
to birds barter for love.
Take out "tight", and the "barter for love" sounds fine as it is.
sonically
Sonically and Tactilely. Feelingly