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06-07-2023, 08:41 PM

(06-07-2023, 08:02 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote: I noted that you cut the 'barter for love' stanza, ouch!

Oops. My bad. Nothing wrong with that stanza (and its omission wasn't intentional.)

The birds set up the feet, you really don't need that last verse, and, if you'll allow, the reader will bring their own context (so yes, I think you are overthinking Smile

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One-way Ticket (new title) final... - by brynmawr1 - 06-02-2023, 01:40 PM

RE: Since you been gone or Unseasonable - by TranquillityBase - 06-02-2023, 10:03 PM

RE: Since you been gone or Unseasonable - by brynmawr1 - 06-02-2023, 11:19 PM

RE: Unseasonable - by Knot - 06-05-2023, 07:14 PM

RE: Unseasonable - by brynmawr1 - 06-06-2023, 03:00 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit) - by Knot - 06-06-2023, 07:34 PM

RE: Unseasonable(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 06-07-2023, 08:02 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit) - by TranquillityBase - 06-07-2023, 06:17 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit) - by busker - 06-07-2023, 10:24 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 06-08-2023, 12:25 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit) - by Knot - 06-07-2023, 08:41 PM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by rowens - 06-08-2023, 06:34 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 06-08-2023, 11:39 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by TranquillityBase - 06-08-2023, 07:25 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by Knot - 06-08-2023, 04:40 PM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by TranquillityBase - 06-09-2023, 01:41 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by rowens - 06-09-2023, 01:54 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 06-09-2023, 08:06 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by TranquillityBase - 06-09-2023, 09:53 PM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by rowens - 06-09-2023, 09:52 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by Tiger the Lion - 06-09-2023, 10:06 AM

RE: Unseasonable(edit2) - by Knot - 06-09-2023, 05:14 PM

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