One-way Ticket (new title) final...

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It’s cold here
and it shouldn’t be
in mid-May.
 
The first bird chitters
a defeated sleep                defeating sleep (?)
in the dim light.
The grey before dawn
 
builds the chorus one by one
calling for the rising sun
to bring a day I don’t want begun.
 
Covers tugged tight
to my chin, I listen
to birds barter for love.       my favorite line
 
My feet search within
the chill only to settle
each for the other.
 
It’s cold here.
It didn’t used to be
in mid-May.                  not sure this final repetition adds much.  ending with previous stanza seems like a good idea to me.

Hi Bryn,

Only a couple of suggestions.  Original sounds like bird is defeating its sleep, whereas I assume you are referring to the sleeper.

I like Unseasonable as a title.

TqB