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[brynmawr1]

I agree with TB on the posted version being the better. 

God, that poor sad love letter!

His love letter lies
on a park bench words bleeding
with every rain drop

alternative version

His love letter lies
on a park bench words bleeding
more with each rain drop

Hi Val,
I've gone round and round about whether the first word should be a pronoun or an article.  Any thoughts?
Thanks,
bryn