Soporific (new title)

[brynmawr1]

Hi Steve-

That title has got to go, brother.  It screwed the whole thing up for me.

The haiku/senryu is okay by me except for that word 'anxious'- it just doesn't seem to fit in, especially with 'lullabies' in such close proximity.  I get it when I read the spoiler, but you do know, of course, that explaining is cheating.

For me, the sounds from the first 2 lines are delicious.

I'd suggest an 'L' word in place of 'anxious'.  These short ones are so much 'fun', right?

Thanks,
Mark

Hey Mark,
Yeah, I haven't gotten around to changing the title yet.  I do enjoy writing the short ones (they fit my attention span), but do get lost in the infinite possibilities.  Funny how the shorter it gets the more the forks in the road grow. So many ideas for the last line!  I'll just have to pick one.

I have to say that I appreciate everyone pushing each other to be better, get beyond.

Thanks mark,
steve