Soporific (new title)

[brynmawr1]

Waves licking the shore
wet lips mouthing lullabies
makes for anxious sleep

Spent last weekend in a cabin on a lake.  It was beautiful but the constant lapping of waves at night was annoying me.  What is also annoying is the endless versions of this poem I wrote since then and this one is nothing like all the others

Oh dear! With the title, I thought that this was an extended metaphor for a colonoscopy. I thought the drugs they used to put you out must have been pretty wild!

What about "wet lips slurping lullabies" because I think that has a nice sonic effect?

And maybe a different title . . . like "Weekend Getaway"?

Hi VP,
I hate titles.  I was trying to hint at the water sounds causing frequent trips to the bathroom but it's a stretch.
bryn