Soporific (new title)
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(05-29-2023, 11:48 PM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  
(05-29-2023, 11:04 PM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  Waves licking the shore
lips smacking wet lullabies
makes for anxious sleep
"smacking" ?  what about "mouthing"?  smacking seems too loud a word to me.
They were annoyingly loud but i like mouthing.  Reads better.  
Thanks TqB
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Soporific (new title) - by brynmawr1 - 05-29-2023, 11:04 PM
RE: Prostate Problems - by TranquillityBase - 05-29-2023, 11:48 PM
RE: Prostate Problems - by brynmawr1 - 05-30-2023, 01:44 AM
RE: Prostate Problems - by Valerie Please - 05-30-2023, 11:45 AM
RE: Prostate Problems - by brynmawr1 - 05-30-2023, 09:03 PM
RE: Prostate Problems - by Valerie Please - 05-31-2023, 09:13 AM
RE: Prostate Problems - by Mark A Becker - 05-31-2023, 02:14 AM
RE: Prostate Problems - by brynmawr1 - 05-31-2023, 09:02 AM



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